Talk:Lashauwn Beyond/GA1
GA Review[edit]
The following discussion is closed. Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
| GA toolbox |
|---|
| Reviewing |
Article (edit | visual edit | history) · Article talk (edit | history) · Watch
Nominator: Another Believer (talk · contribs) 21:52, 19 December 2023 (UTC)
Reviewer: Riley1012 (talk · contribs) 12:52, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
Hello! I will complete a review within one week. -Riley1012 (talk) 12:52, 18 May 2024 (UTC)
- Thanks! Looking forward to collaborating and addressing any of your concerns. ---Another Believer (Talk) 21:46, 19 May 2024 (UTC)
Good Article review progress box
|
I'm going to go section by section
- Sounds good! ---Another Believer (Talk) 13:58, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
Lead
No notes here.
Like ---Another Believer (Talk) 13:58, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
Early life and education
- Just to add some more details: ref. 2 says her hometown is Plantation, Florida.
- Mentioned in Personal life section. I only add a city as a birth location if a source specifically confirm where they are born, not where they are "from" or living. ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:03, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
Drag Career
- Could add from ref. 1 that she wanted to audition when she was 20, but had to wait until she was 21 due to the show's rules.
- Added "She wanted to audition for Drag Race when she was 20 years old, but had to wait until she was 21 because of the show's age requirements." ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:07, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
- ...placing twelfth overall Add a citation showing her placement
- There are sources describing her elimination, but not necessarily saying "twelfth" specifically. I see this as a basic fact per RuPaul's Drag Race season 4, not really something that's controversial or disputable. ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:10, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
RuPaul's Drag Race
- Since she was eliminated in the second episode, add a sentence or two about her performance in the first episode.
- Added "According to Mariana Fernandes of Screen Rant, Lashauwn Beyond 'showed great promise' on the premiere episode ("RuPocalypse Now!"), which tasked contestants with creating a post-apocalyptic look." ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:15, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
- Add a sentence or two with the context of the fight with Jiggly Caliente (I see this information in ref. 16).
- Added, "Lashauwn Beyond and fellow contestant Jiggly Caliente got into an argument after Lashauwn Beyond called Jiggly Caliente out for not knowing how to sew, and Jiggly Caliente was offended that Lashauwn Beyond did not share her thoughts about her look." If you can think of a better way to summarize the dispute, I am all ears! ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:21, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
Personal life
- Add detail that she came out after her appearance on the show (ref. 21).
Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:23, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
Filmography
- Add inline citations for these and put in a table instead of in a list.
- Done ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:27, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
I did not find any prose, MOS, reliability, or copyright (I spotchecked all 22 sources) issues. Pride.com and Screen Rant are marginally reliable sources according to WP:RSP, but they are fine to use in this context. Unfortunately, there are no images.
- Like Thanks! ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:23, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
@Another Believer: I will pass this once there are a few more details added to pass criteria 3a. -Riley1012 (talk) 13:56, 23 May 2024 (UTC)
- @Riley1012 Thanks for the review! I think I've addressed your concerns, but please let me know if any remain. ---Another Believer (Talk) 14:28, 23 May 2024 (UTC)